Sequence 2 — Me, My Personality and Life Experiences › Language form
Narrating with the past simple and the past continuous : « while » and « when »
- بناء الماضي المستمرّ : was · were + V-ing، في الإثبات والنفي والاستفهام
- التمييز بين الخلفيّة (ماضٍ مستمرّ) والحدث (ماضٍ بسيط) داخل السرد
- استعمال while مع الحدث الممتدّ وwhen مع الحدث القصير
- وضع الفاصلة في موضعها بحسب موقع while أو when من الجملة
- سرد حادثة قصيرة في خمسة أسطر بالزمنين معا
- الماضي البسيط : لاحقة -ed والأفعال الشاذّة
- to be في الماضي : was · were وwasn't · weren't
- صياغة V-ing وقواعد إملائها : write ⟹ writing · run ⟹ running
Presentation
We were writing the last exercise when the lights went out. Nobody moved. Outside it was raining, and for a moment the only sound in the room was the rain on the windows. Then somebody laughed. While we were laughing, the teacher opened the shutters, one after the other, and the grey light came in. She did not say a word. She was waiting. When the last shutter was open, she picked up her book and went on reading. We finished the exercise by daylight.
What does this story tell you before you read any rule?What does this story tell you before you read any rule?ماذا تعلّمك هذه الحكاية قبل أن تقرأ القاعدة ؟
- Two shapes of verb keep alternating: were writing, was raining, were laughing, was waiting on one side; went out, moved, laughed, opened, came, picked up, finished on the other.
- The first shape always tells you what was already going on — the scene. The second usually tells you what happened — the event. The scene is long, the event is a point.
- Look at the very first sentence: the long action comes first, then when, then the short one. And in the third paragraph it is the other way round: While + the long action, comma, then the short one.
- ⟹ while stands in front of the long action. when stands in front of the short one. That is the whole distribution, and the story never breaks it.
Now read the story again with only the second list of verbs: “Nobody moved. Somebody laughed. The teacher opened the shutters. She picked up her book.” Everything happened, and nothing was seen. The past continuous is what puts the reader inside the room.
| What you want to say | The tense and the marker | Example |
|---|---|---|
| The scene that was already going on | past continuous alone — was / were + V-ing | Outside it was raining. She was waiting. |
| The event that happened once | past simple alone | Nobody moved. Somebody laughed. |
| A long action cut short by an event | long action + when + short event | We were writing the exercise when the lights went out. |
| The same, seen from the long action | While + long action, comma, short event | While we were laughing, the teacher opened the shutters. |
| Two events, one after the other | When + past simple, past simple | When the last shutter was open, she picked up her book. |
One tense changes everything
A former teacher is asked about her pupils. She could answer in two ways: a. I didn't complain about them. b. I wasn't complaining about them. ⟹ One of the two means “never, during all those years”. The other means “not at that particular moment”. Which is which — and in which situation would you use the second one?
The answer, and the rule behind itThe answer, and the rule behind itالجواب، والقاعدة التي وراءه.
a. I didn't complain about them — never, not once, over the whole period. It is the past simple, and the past simple looks at the years as one closed block. b. I wasn't complaining about them — at that moment, at the moment we are speaking about, that is not what I was doing. It is the past continuous, and the past continuous looks at one moment from inside it. ⟹ You would use b to correct somebody: “You were complaining about your pupils!” — “No, I wasn't complaining about them, I was describing them.”
Read the left column, then the right one. On the left, everything is finished and counted. On the right, everything is going on and interrupted. ⟹ Before you choose a tense, ask yourself one question: “am I saying what happened, or am I saying what was going on when it happened?”
Practice
a. We (to write) the last exercise when the lights (to go) out. b. While it (to rain), nobody (to leave) the room. c. The teacher (to open) the shutters while we (to laugh). d. When the light (to come) back, she (to pick) up her book. e. She (not to complain) about her pupils — not once, in ten years.
Answers to Exercise 1Answers to Exercise 1
| Answer | Why | |
|---|---|---|
| a | We were writing the last exercise when the lights went out. | long action + when + short event |
| b | While it was raining, nobody left the room. | While opens the long action; comma; then the past simple |
| c | The teacher opened the shutters while we were laughing. | while in the middle ⟹ no comma, and it still takes the long action |
| d | When the light came back, she picked up her book. | two short events one after the other ⟹ two past simples |
| e | She didn't complain about her pupils. | “not once, in ten years” is a closed, counted period ⟹ past simple |
Choose something that really happened to you: a fall, a rain shower, a lost key, a stranger who spoke to you. a. Write one sentence of scene, in the past continuous: where you were and what was going on. b. Write one sentence with when: the moment the event cut in. c. Write two sentences in the past simple: what happened next. d. Finish with one sentence beginning with While. ⛔ Do not invent the incident. A narrative you have not lived is felt in the second line.
Answers to Exercise 2 — one possible narrativeAnswers to Exercise 2 — one possible narrative
- It was getting dark and I was waiting for the bus in front of the school.
- I was reading the times on the panel when somebody called my name.
- I turned round. It was my old teacher of primary school.
- While we were talking about my class, the bus passed without stopping.
⭐ Count the tenses: four past continuous for what was going on, four past simple for what happened. That is the proportion of any good narrative — the scene and the event, almost half and half. A story written entirely in the past simple reads like a police report; one written entirely in the past continuous never arrives anywhere.
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